All I can picture are these two little golfball sized peaches stuck to front of a girl. Not a pretty picture.
The second thing that’s really been bugging me lately is the constant description of seeing something on a characters face/or eyes.
They had placed him in the darkest corner of the room. Her gaze flickered to him. Was that admiration in his eyes? No it was suspicion and just a hint of amusement.
How in the ever loving fuck do you see three different things in a person’s eyes, and with only a flicker to boot. Oh … in the very depths there she could see just a smidgen of desire. Just a smidgen oh but it was plain as day to her eyes from across the three hundred foot room.
Can you read the look in someone’s eyes? I can’t. I must be blind I think. Or I don’t look closely enough.